Comment on Gary's Industrial Food paper

I can tell that your focus is our corn is the essential aspect of the IFS. Therefore, be sure to let people know this is your focus. I would also recommend you to talk about health problems associated with people eating Industrial food.

Comment on Isabella's Industrial Food Paper

I recognize that your thesis pertains to "The Machine" in the food industry. I like how you emphasized the effects of the machine on our country as a whole, but you can discuss further the problems with the IFS. In addition, your definition should of the IFS should be unambiguous so it could help you organize the content of your paper. Very promising paper.

Industrial Agriculture

Omnivore's Dilemma:
It has significant insight into Industrial Agriculture suppored by numerous facts. This book is good for finding quotes about this issue.
Fast Food Nation:
This is another book that talks alot about Industrial Agriculture. Written in a different way than Omnivore's Dilemma.
"Daily Bread":
Great footage depicting animals being raised and slaughtered. As well as, non-animal food products being grown. Shows patterns in the industry without using dialouge.
Writting discussion preps:
This allows us to further articulate our thoughts and observations pertaining to Industrial Agriculture. This was done with the books we read.
The Meatrix:
Sums up the essence of what we need to know in short clips. The animation can guide anyone along.
Fast Food Experiences:
This offers a first hand experience. We can see what happens after food is processed and at the end of the food industry chain.

McDonald's has a new problem

On sunday, I went to a McDonald's in Astoria. After thinking about what I would do for food class, I came up with a plan. I was determined to demonstrate how the food people were eating was detrimental to their health. On posterboard I wrote "McDonald's Kills You!!!" Then I listed as many health problems as possible that can be linked to consuming a lot of fast food. The list was as follows:
-Obesity
-Heart Disease
-Hypertension
-Heart Attack
-Stroke
-Diabtetes
-Food Poisoning

So, I walked into the store and went to the top floor. I held up the sign and said "McDonald's Kills You" in a louder voice. I walked right up to people and showed them the sign so they could read it. In this 15 minute episode, I sat down next to people and just stared at them. Eventually a worker asked me to leave the premises before he called the manager and I didn't want to cause more trouble. SO I left with a nervous, but satisfied look on my face.

I received various reactions. A few times people kindly or belligerently told me to leave them alone. One person told me that he didn't give a shit what I had to say because it is none of my business and he cursed at me. An elderly woman made me laugh when she told me she had diabetes, for the obvious reason. So I told her that there are so many other places to eat out and cautioned her against eating at McDonald's and she promised me she would stop. A group of young women told me for what purpose was I acting for and I told her that I feel strongly about this subject and I want people to be cognizant of what they eat and know the serious health issues entailed. The women seemed very interested and then left shortly after. SO I guess my day was somewhat successful. It was defintely scary for me to do this alone because I feel more comfortable working with other people.

My Comment on Simone's Diet Paper

Great insight and nice use of quotes and citations.
My only area of concern is to prove that there are chemical additives in our meat. Otherwise, great job.